by Master_Vassago
Kävin Leena siskon kanssa Sexhibitionissä. Kävimme privaattiesityksessä. Samalla nussimme kiimassa paljaalla. Leenaa ei haitannut naisstripparin läsnäolo eikä kukaan tuntenut meitä.
I'm so hard right now that when my sister comes home I'm going to have her sit on my lap while we read your story TOGETHER! I'll let you know if she likes it!
Now I will be looking for CH.2 So keep it up and do it soon.You can add meeny CH. to this one. Mabe have her frinds come into it.
I liked it lil bit short bit good anyway if you could add a heromdrrphite or2 that would be kool
The storyline was good. I don't believe that its too short. The problem is that its too fast. You should have put in a little more details to help build your story at a slower, sexier pace. Other than that it was lovely and I can't wait for the continuation.
Oh yes I like love that story! Just needs to be continued and add in some good details. You are doing very well so far. Keep up the good work!
It is a story well done. Please continue,if done right you can take this story a long way. Watch the punctuation and spelling though, some mistakes, not too many though.
Great storyline. Can't wait to see your continuation. But I do have to agree with many of the other comments, though. I'd like to see more details. For example, he fingered her and was playing with her clit. Is she clean shaven or hairy? How did she react? Was she getting so excited by has attention that she was squirming in the seat? At least when he tweaked her nipples, she said, "Mmmm..." Etc.
...You have NOT described her "BREAST",much,,,just mention her nipples...Thank God,you didn't fall into the "Usual" description of"...39DD with Silver Dollar size aerolas..." ,so you can keep them reasonable Apple size or even smaller...OF course I like them small breasted...Flintstone54
Excellent start to what looks like a wonderfull erotic and hot story.
Great start hope you continue the theam and maby are a little more descriptive of the participents semed too short
What a great start but build upon it slowly,all great stories do this. Make the next chapter longer,and describe thier physical sensations a little more
It seemed too short. A good start... but only if the next segment comes soon!
let your next story start with them in his room and then onto college, so he can protect her.
as stated by others i would love the next part to this great start of a series. loved the sexy way it played out and cant wait to read the next part
You need to finish soon, the rest of the story. What you have done is create a nice series that could lead all the way to him coming home and going to college and living with her to protect her from all those horny college boys...lol.
Hey this is really great and I'm waiting on the rest. thought of sex many times in my younger days with my sis.
Thought about writing about it but can't seem to ever get going. I'm waiting on the rest of the story....lol.
Fantastic! Just what I've always wanted to do with my own sister. I can't wait for the next chapter. tommy3
Great fucking story (sorry, no pun intended). Can't wait for the next installment. HOT!!!