by phillygirl01
You are a good writer. Your characters have some depth and their actions ring true. And the buildup to the sex was outstanding. It also had all the elements of the taboo that are kinky turnons. So unexpected and so all concuming was the mutual lust of the twins that the word contraception never appears. They were so wrapped in in their wanting each other that neither one apparently even thought about it. That left the reader wondering if those panties of hers being so very wet was the result of thinking of having sex or perhaps her wetness was that very wet lubrication women get when the are ovulating. Good job and write more.
Very, Very outstanding.I thoroughly loved all three chapters. They were very tender towards each other. So terrific how she also teased him, and then before he came, stopped and got him inside...WOW
This girl really writes well. TThis is a great sensuous story!
Your characters appear very natural. They interrelate with familiarity and a degree of tenderness that make them seem so real. You will disappoint many of your readers if you can't find the time and inspiration to write a few more spicy chapters.
Some feedback would be appreciated!
so go to my bed!!!
another great story of happy families. Well done.