All Comments on 'Trusting Love Ch. 02'

You had me almost in tears, I thougnt she had died.

I like the story but you REALLY need to work on your writing or get a new editor. I had to reread a couple paragraphs because i didn't know what was going on. Its a good story and the direction it's going on seems really interesting.

I need to know what happens next. What is she? Who are on this group of immortals killing different races?

Love your story thus far and I suspect things will become clearer as the story progresses. Thanks for adding something new and refreshing to an already saturated genre. Hopefully, though, Tara 2.0 will have better judgment. I can't wait for your next update.

Look foward to more, one thing I do not understand. This grand master sound male, but I thought succubi were female and incubi were male. Is the grand master a woman. Also, I hope now that she is going to survive that she catches ray hangs it upside down by his little needle dick if he even has one, skins his sorry ass alive and makes him eat his own flesh. And then feeds his penis to him

I liked this beginning alot. I am going to read it again, but I can't help but feel this chapter was very confusing. First, I don't think you used her name in the first chapter (if I am wrong sorry) and when you mentioned Tara in this ch. I was like 'who?' So, I'd recommend attaching a name right away. Just like, I don't think the guy who ordered the others to him was given a name yet, so later it will be a bit confusing when he mis mentioned again. I also can't help but feel that we don't know what all the men who met him are. What was the reason the lycans were doomed by her death? Why were they not part of the council and wanted dead? What security risk were they? What is an ancient exactly? What are their abilities and why are the rest so scared of her. Do they know what she is and if so why do they think they can kill her? I just would like to see you make some details a bit clearer in the story. But, overall I look forward to the rest. It is an interesting start. Hope it stays just as exciting. I am wondering if Trev knows she is alive.

Thanks anon I had forgotten that bit of info and will correct it. Cannd I have always found too many names to be confusing in a story and thot to reduce them when certain characters were not going to be too prominent. From yo comment it seems I made it more confusing so I will have to revise that to which end I will post an edit which will hopefully clarify the scene. As to the other questions they will be answered as the story unfolds have them all worked out and the aside from the five men in the last scene none of the immortals know she is an ancient even the lycans

This chapter was confusing, too many sub-plots

If there will be anymore chapters or not? Hope there will be more.

I love the idea of rebirth! Please please please continue this story!

PLEASE let me edit your next story!!! I'm really solid on grammar and spelling. Your stories don't need much to make them really really shine. I'd be happy to help out.

Starting to get addicted...great story so far

You misused some words. Also, camoflash should be camouflage.

The first chappy was ok. This one...needs work.

But it gets interesting.

This is really good!

Thanks for posting!