All Comments on 'Twenty Cups Ch. 03'

Thanks for another awesome chapter.

HOWEVER, BEING A RETIRED SENIOR EDITOR I HAVE TO ASK WHY DO SOME AUTHORS USE THE ( ... ) IN THEIR STORIES? CONSIDER YOU LOAD IT INTO A TEXT EDITOR AND THIS IS WHAT IS SOUNDS LIKE. EXAMPLE: "That's...I told you I would...do that," I countered. "That's dot dot dot I told you I would dot dot dot do that," I countered. WHY THERE IS A USE OF THE THREE DOTS IS BEYOND ME. WHEN I RECEIVED TRANSCRIPT WITH THE USE OF DOTS, I'D SPANK MY SECRETARY AND HAVE HER TOSS IT IN THE TRASH BIN! ALTHOUGH WE DO CORRECT ANY ASPECT OF THE WRITING, I ALSO HAVE TO CONSIDER WHAT IT AUDIBLY SOUNDS LIKE WHEN LOADED INTO, SAY, TEXTALOUD, THE SAME TEXT EDITOR I USE! MAYBE IT MAY HELP TO IMPROVE YOUR STORIES! I SPENT ALMOST 10 MINUTES EDITING YOUR SECOND PAGE! THANKS FOR A VERY WELL WRITTEN STORY!

@Randog025, an ellipsis is used in informal writing to represent a trailing off of thought. It can also indicate hesitation, though in this case the punctuation is more accurately described as suspension points. think of it as a to indicate a pause like you would do in natural speaking.

I have read many stories by professional authors that use ellipsis.

I hope more chapters are forthcoming.

As for ellipsis, I guess Randog is a 'self trained' editor. It's commonly used in written conversations, although to be fair not in a business document. But then this story is certainly not a business document. I learned about them in grade school along with commas, periods etc.

This is one of the hottest stories I've ever read!

One of the best story lines in Lit. 5 stars, fave story, please don't stop. You are tremendously talented.

Thanks for your efforts, max052.

Even if you retired and obviously hard of hearing.

Yes the dots are old school and being used less. I think just because authors are too lazy to press too many keys.

Keep up the good story fsqueeze. The kid is taking advantage of mum and sisters, but what horny guy wouldn't. When all three aee pregnant mum might begin to realise he is potent after all.

Aunt smells funny because she was originally their uncle, but that was before the kids remember.

Loved it cannot wait for more.

As for the ellipses, you can safely ignore that rant. It's not even remotely correct. Ellipses are used in literature quite often especially with dialogue.

Can"wait for more. One of the better story lines, well thought out and diagramed.

More this is awesome

Please get that 4th chapter written I am D Y I N G

Chapter 4 please!

my one star is enough coment

You wrote, Lia smiled, too. "I hope there are more 'other times.'"

It should be, Emma smiled, too. "I hope there are more 'other times.'"

glad to see a part 4 was worried this would end

Felt like emma shoulda got his virginity with the tease early in the series