All Comments on 'Twenty'

Very well done - thank you - five stars.

A very imaginative and intense scene that is well-written. Good job getting into the head of the narrator so we see/exeperience events through her eyes.

Amazing story, I loved the inner narration/outer narration you had going on. Not everyone can do that right, but you knocked it out of the park. I can only think of one thing I would change- I'd personally like to know what she was maing them drink. Haha, anyway, loved it- 5 stars.