All Comments on 'TwiLight Ch. 06'

Am so glad to see more of one of my favourite stories! Nice touch with the marriage between Damien and Chloe .. It made their relationship that more special..hope to see another chapter if you're willing! Jacinta xxo

Thanks Jacinta it means a lot to me to hear good things. These are actual events between me & my master though I have changed our names to protect our privacy. I had a falling out with them though with people who were trying to tell me I was speaking about a child when I was not.

Aw, that was very cute. Please write another chapter.

This had potential, the plot was good, but the delivery was poor. You kept mixing up the facts (eye color, ages, etc.), also you misspelled to many words and the grammar was bad. You jumped in time leaving the reader to wonder what was going on, etc, etc, etc... You need editors and a mentor.

I always put myself in cloe's place and damn it works

Sorry, it doesn't work. Kidnapped, noncon, bipolar/socialopathic/schizophrenic wannabe master with pedophile tendencies. Story swings all over in actions and emotions. Details are not consistent. Stockholm Syndrome is not the same as a happy ending.

The ending left me hanging! Did she really vanish AND became happy with her kidnapper? Why the “the walk in the cemetery”, was there a reason?