All Comments on 'Two Couples, One Cabin: A Seduction'

Very hot, entertaining, enticing, desirable. The only thing I’d want to do differently would be to retire to a separate bed with Selena, take hours making each cum with our mouths and hands, then finish deeply inside Selena to celebrate and make sure she knew it should happen many more times.

Have the writer been in one? I doupt it. You just don't leve a sauna and put your clothing back on without a shower first!

Please write another part to this story soon !

...the ejaculations ending up in mouth and bodies rather than deep inside pussies. Felt like the writer was following a porn script.

the build up was beautiful ...

Well done Ray. Had one experience like this back in college, and it happened almost identically to this. A hot tub rather than a sauna, but other than that I thought your story was very realistic, very believable. Thanks for a great story!.

Great story! The prior mutual attraction was just the frosting on the cake! Great story.

One of the best stories I've read on Lit in a long time. You made me fall in lust with Selena myself!

Awesome adventure.

i read the story with my wife had to take a break half through lol after the break finish the story had to take another break lol

This story brought back memories of 5 days in a caravan, thanks!

Amazing story. Would love to hear more about Selena and Alex.

Thanks so much for the comments and feedback everyone! I'd glad that you liked Selena. She was based on a real person, and I like to think that someday she'll stumble upon this story and know that it was inspired by her!

This is a great story with great characters and lots of erotic tension. It balances perfectly between hot sexual erotic fiction and great storytelling and great character development. I’d love to learn more about Matt, Selena, and April. There’s a lot you can do with them. Good luck. I look forward to reading more about them.

Too little about his relationship with April. Read like he was in love with Selena. But well written story all the same. Fun read, great story. It should be scoring higher, if that really matters. I came back to rate it 5! Shame on me that I didn't rate it before.

Would love a part two where they get to experiment freely and openly with each other as a group now the ice has broken

This was amazing! I quickly cared about the characters and just got pulled in by the story. Well crafted moments and also made me laugh often! Absolutely amazing story, 5/5! It was a joy to read.

Extremely well written. Totally believable. I can't give compliments other than what's already been said. Supremeo!!

This is the first of your stories I've read. Very well crafted and thought out. It would benefit from a little more proof reading/editing. I am certainly going to go through the rest of your stories. Keep up your good work.

You may have to make writing erotic stories your career. This is the 3rd of your stories I've had the pleasure of reading...… "Pleasure" given that it held my attention, was well-detailed and avoided the pitfalls of crude stuph. I know others may find that element "exciting," and that's ok....it's just that I prefer a well-written story that tells a viable story and includes salacious episodes.

Your stories (so far!) do all of this across the board. Thank you! You might want to do a proof before publishing by reading the paragraphs BACKWARDS.....easy way to find spelling and/or simple grammar mistakes. Just a tip, not a criticism...!

Thanks Voyjer! I really appreciate your recent comments and feedback and I'm very happy you're enjoying going through my stories. Thanks so much for reading!

Best constructed story I've read. Aesthetics of romance nicely portrayed.

I always enjoy a story about people with an adventurous spirit and an open mind.

Very good build up to an erotic conclusion! Well done Ray ;->

Enjoyed this story very much. Good job keeping story flowing. Great pace.

This story was exactly what I needed! I was invested the whole way through. Great writing/word choice/build up/ descriptions

Thank you!

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Great imagination and well communicated!

Absolutely unbelievable, the number of LW authors that write about spraying

semen all over the room. Must be lack of actual experience.

So, so good.

I thought at first that the premise was pretty much done to death. Boy, was I wrong. I loved your approach and enjoyed the characters. Well done.

Fan-fucking-tastic. Great story. Well done. Please write more. Thanks.

Very nicely done. You captured the personalities very nicely.

Please make a follow up story or even better- make it a series!

By far the best story I have read so far. Beautifully built characters, storyline and situations. Please..more!

Damn that was hot. The author made it sexy, dirty and exciting and not once did he talk about the guys being 8 or 9 inches, or the girls being DD's. He left the exact size up to the readers imagination, only letting us know that they were big.

Excellent writing.

Was a great story. Would have liked a more detailed descrption of bodies.. but if this was a porno i would be hard throughout

The heart of the story was Selena. The initial description of her physically and her personality as a restaurant hostess was important.

The weak points of the story was leaving the sauna and going to bed. Gee, do it right. Leave the sauna and go outside and jump in the lake, then come in dry off and go to bed.

Considering that April had to jumpstart everything on the last day of the trip, she could have did that on day one. She could have made a move on Matt when he fell in the lake and undressed by the fire. Then they could have had a whole weekend of wild debauchery. The last night should have been pure swap in separate bedrooms.

Leaving the physical descriptions vague was excellent. It's allowed each reader to imagine their own sense of physical attractiveness.

Enjoyable story. Many thanks

Thank you. Loved the story despite the drawbacks. The drawbacks being lack of characterization especially in April. She is the pivotal character making it all possible, yet she did not leave a significant impression. Not to mention Matt comes off more like Random Bashful Guy Template #14 instead of a person. I feel more interesting and fleshed out characters would have made the story better.