by jav184
At today's exchange rates, 2 Vietnamese dongs are worth $0.000086 (i.e., less than one ten thousandanth of a dollar). Sounds about right for the value of this submission.
I too think it was rushed. You did a good job building up to the sex scene but then it seemed rushed from there on out. Since you said they like to spice up their sex life and are adventurous, you could have added more foreplay, dp, they could have rested then started the next session making it an all nighter, or brought her friend along for a foursome, etc. This story would have been a lot better if it had gone further. I liked it and but would have loved it more if it hadn't been rushed. Maybe you could fix it up a bit and repost. Just a thought.
Had sex/made love to your wife for an HOUR. I don't know about anyone else but does ANYONE last an HOUR with a woman?
I would guess the wife got a book or something to read while he was pounding away in her or perhaps did the crossword. I have heard of men who cum quickly, although I would guess at most a man could last say 10 or 15 minutes? Just a guess of course, but an hour of pounding away in to a woman? even in a fictional sex story there has to be some sort of reality. But it's your story and you are into this life style I just wonder if you have a wife after this? or is she your best friends slut.
Why was he at school? What did they do the next morning after fucking all night? How did they meet? Build the characters so the reader believes they are real. Thanks for the story.....Rich
Glad you gave it to her. I could tell she was a pig right from the start. Next time bring everybody you can find at school home with you, but make sure you have plenty of lube so next time she doesn't get sore.
I felt you rushed the story. Remeber there are thousands of stories like this on here so you have to try and make yours a little different. Take more time describing the details and the build up of the foreplay, teasing and the sex. Try to tease the readers of your story. but keep writing.