All Comments on 'Two Horny'

A very good story for your first time. Do continue with the others.

Congrats on your 1st submission!

As stated above it provided an interesting and entertaining quick read.

I do hope there is more of this or similar stuff from you in the near future.

only thing,you inferred something happened with your dad & you to get out of trouble then said you hope to see dads dick & suck fuck him a bit confusing but only small

It just needs a little cleaning up, that proofreading would take care of. 4*s.

Very good for your first time. I like how you eluded to something happening between the dad and daughter. Keep it up.

Very Good. It does however need a proof reader,eg.' he turned his HAND to look at me'.

I really enjoyed it, looking forward to further chapters.

Yes, a nice brother-sister story about Drew having a first time with his sister. A few more details would be good. Hopefully, Drew's sister will teach him how to better go about holding, kissing and having sex in different positions. He might get even more stamina and learn to perform better. A great start and he is a luck brother !!

Thanks.

Let me start out by saying amazing job for a fist timer I happen to be an aspiring novelist myself, I'll admit I was expecting a lot less, it was great though, I felt that you could have started off a but earlier and given a tad more build up..... Naw that's over used right? Well all in all I give 5/5 looking forward to sequals

Good start to the story, a few grammatical erros but still, greats story, keep going

the eluding to dad and daughter getting involved does absolutely nothing for me. adding dad to the mix or the mom to a bro sis story always ruins it.

The ending was fucking hilarious.

It was awesome I got really wet reading it someone text me on kik my username is "masterofslaves116"

Fabulous beginning! A little more build up would have been good, but it didn't ruin the story at all. Alluding to interactions with the dad seemed out of place and unnecessary. LOVED the last line, brought some great humor to the piece, keep up the good work.

+97455731208 I Wana hear more.. could pay u

Great story until, "Can we do anal?". That was a real boner deflater.

This is very detailed and made me very wet

Came over 9000 times

Wasn't sure if this would take off like it did.

But it did.

Just had a nice wavy orgasm with a large, thick load.

Will hit chapter 2 tonight.

mmmm nice writing thank you.

was very good for your 1st story! a bit more proof-reading would be good, but definitely reading chapter 2 tonight 🔥

back for more hehehehe...

Loved the story.

Hope we have more chapters.

I definitely hope there is more great stories to tell of this duo!

GREAT