All Comments on 'Typical Family'

You lost me half way through the first page when it became obvious that the rest of the family were fucking up a storm behind Tim's back. The guy is either stupid or blind. Neither of which is a good trait for this place.

Erotically well written but I do get irritated with inconclusive endings.

This story would definitely benefit from the services of an editor. Your punctuation or lack of, made it difficult to read.

Love the full family sex aspect. Really like inlaws breaking in married in members of the family. Generation to generation. Family sex can be very loving and extremely HOT.

Not so thrilled with the cop-out on "step"-daughter. Its' just fine to want to fuck your very own daughter (and son too).

Keep it up. Looking forward to seeing the family really coming together.

The "you need an editor" comment is spot on. Your work is fairly good except for the fact that your grammar and punctuation issues detract from the story. The "cliffhanger" ending is a little clicheic…everybody knows that an incestuous orgy is about to ensue. A page 3 would have facilitated that nicely, leaving you free to embark on your next tale! ****

I did not like the way it ended I love to read about all the sexual pleasure to take place

Waiting for the rest!!!

Are we going to be getting more

I enjoyed reading this as it wasn't some long drawn out 10 page story. The storylines moves efficiently and it was an enjoyable read. I enjoyed the fact about Al wanting to have "a chat" after his fishing trip and the sheer joy of just stirring the pot to see AL get flustered. Made me chuckle. Hope to read more of this soon!

A good start but when is the next chapter coming? It's been more than six months.

Great set up for a long story, I'm hoping that there's more chapters.... going to look now fingers crossed.

Boo no more parts to the story it's almost 2 years old. It was very good but left me wanting so much more.

This is the way you end the story with no follow up. Sorry but this suck!!!! Only two stars due to no follow up story.