All Comments on 'Ultimate Assassin Saga: Tundra'

This chapter was much better than the previous one

you have improved a lot of damn things

This story is the bomb keep it up!

This was so much better then the first one.

Also how many chapters do you think this story might be?

this is some good stuff.

really liked it.

but i hope this is enough beating around the bush. i think acheron is overdue to meet with his love.

and another thing i might add. i read a qoute somewhere about writing was something like, "Don't tell the readers, show them."

hope you know what i'm saying :)

be quick

loving it

Another good installment in the story. You are still repeating yourself quite a bit. For example, you REALLY hammered home how important Breal found his mission. As well as the possible outcomes repeatedly.

I'm anxious for the next installment, and really hope for an update about Trissieal.

Thanks for writing!

Nyc story. I like the way the story is progressing but at least let us know what is happening to the fallen queen and her son

I would like to request that you use this phrase much more sparingly:

"With a _(voice/face/etc.)_ devoid of all emotion.."

You seem to like it. That is ok. But you use it too frequently.

It would be better if you mix it up a little. For example, you can use "stoically", "emotionless","bland", "blank look", or "an unreadable expression".

Powerful story with precise imagery. Looking forward to your next chapter. Well done!

You way overdo the descriptions and you neglect dialogue. This makes for an incredibly slow pace that loses the reader's interest quickly. I mean, when stuff goes down it is great, but it takes too long to happen. At this point I've been waiting for the lovers to be reunited and it is just taking way too damn long! It started off so strong and now its just kind of drifting off into subplots instead of making head way in the main plot. I love this story and it's plot, and your writing is amazing, but I just want it to not read so slow.