All Comments on 'Unbroken Ch. 16'

the first time i wish that the remaining chapters are there for my perusal ...just one sitting, reading all the way to the end...good chapter, making me ardently wish for the others. thank you vanalas - all your novellas are but good reads...chapter 17 please...

it is hard to wait for long!

I'm not one for swearing, but ... Fucking AWESOME chapter ! ! !

Aidan is sweet, strong and totally awesome in everyway. I love him!

Wyatt, William and the warlocks sound pretty much like my father and brothers....

Please make Aidan win and LIVE ... he must live for his son the future king.

Please post the next chapter soon!

wyatt conquering the kingdom was just athing,u see he's afool ..he is going to enjoy just for three days and then.....BOMB,hehe..that fool doesnt know that it is temporary,with those 8 whores and that slutty son of his,.GOD I HATE THEM THAN HELL ITS SELF

now drama has ended,its time for the real action..like luis said..cowardness is wyatt without magic would he reach this level???FUCK HIM,YUCK

how he treated king julian,,,,God i hate that evil..my luis,,oh that sweet prince..Hanna,queen Ruby,granny

that whore william deserves death,terrible death

how they treated the kingdom,poor guards..That hurts for sure..I reached amoment when i dont read about the people..I was hurt van,how they praised that slut infront of king julian..Sorrow in there eyes....

How they treated my sweet loyal family...No van enough is enough..let wyatt get what he deserves

and plz bring back our sweet Aidan,..I was mad to the highest when he was refusing to go and save luis..I wanted to slap him..God damn it

luis has to see his son..Ahmmmmmm how do u see when he use his magic and take royals to his castle and then fight with that moron freely uh????

Thanks to the priest,he boosted energy in our angel..so ITS ON..,DIE IN HELL THOSE CULPRITS..I HATE THEM..I DONT KNOW HOW MUCH.BUT I HATE THEM SO MANY NOT EVEN MUCH..GOD

Oh Ethan and Justin are athing????i knew it,i knew they had to do it,they may even have fucked.Hahaha,yeah why are they blushing???Haha love is strange,soldier Ethan is in Love,uhmmmmm???Haha

should i give it atheme song???Hmmmmmmmmmmm,got it

trouble-taylor swift

But van,i dont hav much to say,but bring back our sweet happy love..Aidan has to kill wyatt and his rubbish

Aid..Has to produce other kids for luis and we request u to show us how luis takes care of him..i love u so much,thanks for entertaining us..thanks for ur good and excellent work.I love u sooo many..Plz 2moro post please vanalas/king him........??

I HATE WILLIAM AND THAT YUCKY FATHER

I know you write quickly and with great emotion but this can be spoilt for the reader when you get the names of your characters wrong! This was particularly annoying when you kept referring to Prince Luis as William! I still got caught up in the narrative and so am scoring you with a 5!

The 2 last pages made sense into relation awaiting for the battle will be happy to read Wyatt's ass frozen to hell

trust me anon,u wouldnt get the anger if u didnt read how wyatt treated the kingdom,,so it had to read it and get that revenge spirit..In otherwards to me all pages essential

thanks my fellow vanaholics for moral boosting our writer

I'm eager to see what Luis's reaction is when he finds out about the baby and if Aidan will take him back or not. I really hope they do get back together. Great story so far, can't wait for more.

You are the only reason why I come in this site!

van plz

Dont dare even tell me that U.B is gona end..dont tell me please.i want it to continue

but van,plz post

another day of not posting

Silence is golden! Please tell me you will be posting soon....

So sorry guys for the late post but I had some problems that I had to attend to. but now I am back and I have post two chapters which will b approved soon. sorry guys and I love you

The plot of this story is fantastic. It has all the ingredients to keep you hooked waiting for the next chapter. My guess is that chapter 17 will be a complex chapter requiring more effort than most, written so far.

Am I the only one that has refreshed Vanalas story page 10-times tonight, expecting #17 to popup?

not really mathew...I also..Oh van thanks