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All Comments on 'Unconditional Surrender'

by Beowulf4

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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 6 years ago
Desperately in need of an editor

The language was awkward, and the switching back and forth from the first to third person was maddening. Your writing needs editing help. I had to stop reading.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 4 years ago
PLEASE...

...NO MORE.

I wish it was possible to give this a rating of zero - or less.

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I have been writing magazine articles for 20 years.I enjoy adult sexual stories so this is the first time I have attempted being published in this field . Camille Duray,our greatest electric mind,said it best when she said "pornography is art"