All Comments on 'Under My Roof, Under My Clothes'

Hi Cosmic!!

The start of this showed potential....dominant Mom, slightly submissive daughter...good setting of the scene....but then you just let it die off... SO much more you could have done.... meeting nosy, ogling and talkative neighbors, boyfriend insisting on a "tithe" for picking her up...Mom spanking her when she got back or making her stay in panties & bra (or less) for a week, even when friends, family or strangers came to the house.....

How about Chapter 2, and let's see how you can develop the plot???

rest of the story? You just left it hanging with no ending.

If you mean to tell a story, tell it. Don't just start it and then drop it. Agree with previous comment: you just insulted your readers. Or put another way, screw me once, shame on you; screw me twice, shame on me. Why would I want to read a cockteaser story?

What a waste of my time reading this. There are so many ways this could have gone and have been interesting story instead of ending like it did; very juvenile.

Not a good ending at all.

The begging was great, I though this is going to be my new favorite story but the end is really dump. It destroys everything.

Ok so this story was not good, does anyone know of a similar story with a better ending?

I've just read the "cream de la cream" of bad stories. That story gave me a "soft on"!!