All Comments on 'Under the Sea'

Short and sweet for your first, next time be a bit more descriptive, of the characters

First times are always special, and your first story is no exception. The suggestion I would make is to develop the characters a bit more before getting to the sex. Your writing skills are fine.

It was a wonderful story. Please write more as it would be a tragedy if you didn't. As a first try, it was excellent.

Nice work.

hi

I enjoyed your story a lot got me very horny, keep writing, a second chapter, or some more story would be great

Sulph

For a first timer or a hundredth timer, this would be a great story, keep on writing and gettin us hot.

I like it From a readers view. It was very HOT.