All Comments on 'Undercover'

Outstanding 6 stars. Usually the chapters are ovr done on these stories but in your case it would be a crime not to follow this with a part two.

would like to read more about what happens now that the bust is over with. Keep going with chapter two please.

A Chapter 2 is definitely needed for these characters. What happens next, does she get her brother in trouble with his supervisor? Do the siblings fuck? Does she get added as an asset? What happens next?

i`m impressed. i wasn`t expecting much, and this was awesome. very well written, great display of the emotions that would be involved, and not many typos. might want to have a proof read to solve those, though. congrats!

Nice. I wasn't expecting them to get so into the incest, but it wasn't bad. I was more looking forward to the sister's downward spiral, maybe getting on the wrong side of the boss and having to continue in her role for a few weeks/months. That would have made a very hot story, detailing her changing persona as she takes on client after client, maybe getting a "mandatory" tattoo or piercing to show her allegiance.

this is smokin' hot stuff! great job!

Very well done. Story line was well written and very emotional.

I liked the way the girl was held in suspense the entire time despite getting into it.

5Star

The mixed emotions concept of forced incest was clever.

He didn't want his sister to suck his cock but at the same he wanted to feel her lips sliding up and down his shaft.

Even though she didn't want to suck him off she still wanted his cock and cum in her mouth.

The only thing that could have improved it would be if the boss had made Pete pull her pants off and finger fuck her cunt whilst she sucked him.

Good job, but big Tony got left out..

It's a good read but you need to continue with the brother and sister alone. This time without the police work, keep writing.

sheesh bouncing around your stories i like em . . . keep writing.

And then.................? After two years no chapter two.

He was too stupid to tell her he's working over the phone?

She's too stupid to know if her COP brother is at a shifty motel and he tells her not to come there he might be working?