All Comments on 'Unexpected Passions'

A beautiful story marred by poor proofing. Spell check ain't enough.

OK, it's suite, not suit (if he has the wine in his suit, there will be a dry cleaning bill); semen, not seamen (who ride ships); slid, not slide; and there are more I didn't mention. Those seemingly small oversights stop the reader and spoil the effect/mood. Next time, if you're not an excellent speller, get an editor first. Otherwise, good story!

With the intent and purpose that the author has written the story, I seemed to overlook the misuse of a few words, and carried on with enjoying the explicit and well described sex/love tryst between the two lovers. With such vivid explanations of the action going on, I could almost taste that sweet pussy. Thanks for the good story....Rich

If the title of the story is wrong then its hard to read. Look up the words excepts and accepts.

It takes away from the story if the words don't make sense.

Please keep going.

Maybe the cum that ran down her leg. The Corporate world is very catty and backstabbing. You actually wrote the fact that most execs were either trophies or looking for trophies. I came from that Corporate world. Her decision to go ahead should have been away from the group, inknown to them. In reality, William will need to divorce her to maintain his status as a respectable VP or retire and take her away. In actuality, she would become her lovers new arm candy and, guess what...ultimately he wouldn't marry her...She Fucked Up. So did hubby, he should have given her some guidelines. Should you write a sequel, epilogue or chapter 2, you need to use my dissertation as somewhat of a guideline. Other than her poor choice of liason to fuck, I loked her, she seemed fabulous but; unfortunately, she will end up by the wayside!

loved every stroke!

please use spell check on more as it takes my mind off the action

Thanks, I enjoyed reading it. Was McGuire's son named Tom by any chance?

Husband couldn't get it up, wife found a stud . Still he gave her permission. So so story.

Reading the other comments I can see most views have merit other than a score of 1!!!! Sure there needs a little more polish but the content and the erotica was really first class. I loved it. Seen from some mens views it could be seenas a train wreck in the making from a womans view it was a love story. Thanks

Jean

From the land down under

You Get My Vote!...Wicked and Naughty!....★★★★★ Woof!

It is clothes. Of course cloths are involved, but the proper word is clothes.

i do not read to correct as an english professor... been there done that.. a 5

Just another cheating whore and a cuck husband accepting it. Vegas stories are just shit.

An excellent storey, thank you! ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️

The way it should be