All Comments on 'Unexpected Submission Ch. 03'

Great story! You have a great way of describing things with one sentence rather than three. It keeps the story flowing at a pleasant pace. I wish I could give you more than five stars. Thank you!

MastersWench

I hope there's more!

Hopefully there will be more chapters.

I want more...

Great writing, you kept the reader in mind and did well with the changing of the roles. I loved it. B-)

I really enjoyed Chapter 4, but hadn't read 1-3. Now I have and now I'm not enjoying so much. The writing is great and pulls me in, but that makes the problems in each chapter worse for me. Chapter 1 has the dueling banjos of him pushing too fast, too soon and of course she doesn't object at all. Pulled a few ocular muscles trying to stop the eye rolls. Chapter 2-any choking is flat out hard limit for me so, yeah, spoiled the sexy. This chapter, surprise three way with the lesbian, on Valentines, after pulling Linda from a date. Douchery. That it was 'for her' was a lame excuse. Unless she has asked for that prior, it was flat out for his male jollies. I am stunned you let Linda get pissed and-holy cow-use her safeword. But then, it was after the fact and you let her buy his excuse.

After chapters 1-3, I'm less enthused about Brian as a dom. I'm less into Linda's submission as she now seems to have less strength in being willing to safeword When. It. Matters. Your writing is strong. My issues are my own.