All Comments on 'Unfaithful in the Afternoon'

Although the writing was excellent, I was turned off by the random odd thoughts running through the husband's head as he was given the green light to have sex with the new housekeeper. Also, I realize that this is fantasy, but there was literally NO build up before she agreed to have sex with the him. For a writer with such potential, I thought the story line was severely lacking.

So this man has never cheated, never thought of cheating but not only does he fuck a stranger but fucks her in his marriage bed. Okay I figure there's not much further for him to fall but then there are these random ramblings that really make him sound like an idiot. Like this jem, "Because I knew that if I was forgiven, I would never be unfaithful again." Really? Because he had never even thought about being unfaithful and look how faithful he's being in their own home!

It was good, but due to the fact that he just blurted out that he wanted to fuck her and she immediently agreed it was no longer good. He didn't chase after her or she didn't play hard to get it just wasn't good. There needs to be build up