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lost_in_youover 12 years agoAuthorYou're all superb!!
I'm grateful for all the votes and feedback on my stories! You all rock.
Please don't hesitate to let me know if there's something you think could be improved on!
KingCuddlealmost 12 years agoCut this first paragraph! Now!
You've got them all hustling to claim rooms. Keep the urgency. She's one step ahead.
Plus, the preceding scene was more about her and Jason.
I'd prefer that she and Malik are deciding, not decided...yet.)
Anonymousover 8 years agohot
Would have loved for Malik to have carried her to that giant California sized bed.....but still loved the story!
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