All Comments on 'University Roommates'

Story might be about university students, but it seems it was written by a preschooler.

This story was just basically awful from start to finish.

Very good little "Story" and gave it a big 4 for a cute short and to the point read..!**

Looking for more from you in the future.*

I agree with the preschool writing.

I actually didn't realise I accidentally published the rough draft. And it was more for fun than anything serious. I'd love some constructive criticism on this since I probably won't repost the final draft! Thank you!

Characters are believable. While he did the "sleep sex," and while Earnest did do Agatha in the shower, he didn't fuck to ejaculation -- at least it wasn't clear to me that he did (ejaculation feels good, but great sex doesn't always have to end with that; it can be pretty special just being inside and giving her a good time).

Should have added the tag about water sports, though.

Different sperm and egg for each birth? If not kin, either from really good friends or very expensive. In vitro insertion is also expensive, so parents are apparently well off. My understanding, though, if Mother was the standard gestational surrogate (sperm and egg implantation), then while the DNA is different, that both children do share the same mtDNA (mitochondrial). Of course, there are techniques that replace both DNA and mitochondria...

Go ahead and post the edited version. Most naysayers are anonymous and don't post their own stories, but they like to criticize others. To finish a story and post it takes commitment and courage to show it for everyone to see. Keep writing. And thanks for sharing. Watersports not my kink, but will still give 5*

Nice story line. I know this is a draft the problems are there, you know this, but the story is good and definitely could do with a sequel.

Anonymous ( dummmmn ) YOU need to keep your crappy comments to yourself. If you have to comment use your user name. Have a nice day.

Can't wait to see what you will do in the next chapter.