All Comments on 'Unlocking Madeline Ch. 00: The Prologue'

Hello, Cupcake77, and welcome to Literotica and congratulations on your first story here; I hope it is just the first of many! Very well done -- five stars.

Thanks so much! I really appreciate any feedback and constructive criticism. I definitely hope to continue writing and better myself as an author.

Just a couple of corrections needed. Such as using "around" instead of aloud when Lynn leaves the room and maybe use "instances" instead of instants in the paragraph beginning with "Lynn smirked."

I'd love to read the rest of your story.