All Comments on 'Unspoken'

If my memory serves me right I believe Locke said that to Celes after you beat that game. Celes went to go pick up her trinkit and the floor falls thats when Locke runs and grabs her and says "i'll never let go. I promise" I'm a pretty big final fantasy fan myself so I was pretty excited about reading this story thank you.

if she is in high school and he is older and also in high school then she is under age for this site. delete this story and rewite it so she sounds atleast 18 as is she sounds 14-16 the webmasters can delete this story and ban you for the age problem so fix it now

DBRS

why do writers have brothers and sisters fucking for just one night and then every thing is good and never repeated. if it is only once it is a waste of time and will hurt like hell every time you see them with someone else in the future. now every time he goes to a family reunion he will either wish it never happened or wish it would have never stopped either way he will be miserable and so will she. seems like a total waste of time.

DBRS

4/5...there's so many things wrong that I really should give you a 3. But since it's your first effort, I'll cut you a little bit of slack.

1 star for the pathetic writing