by phattie
nice story i dont really like the whole female domination thing but great elaboration and detail giving every character their own personality honesty if you did some type of story in a catagory i liked more you would be an even better writer for me personal but with this story its still great and continue writing
I'm loving this so far! I think you've done a great job with the scenario: it's believable (well, as believable as these things get, anyway!), with a lot of engaging details that really drew me into our unnamed protagonist's "plight". It's fun to speculate about what's really going on, with hints like the blonde doctor's "potential customers".
I also think the addition of the "fan-favourite brunette" is a great touch and really gives us readers something to root for - or it gives us strong expectations for you to dash to smithereens, depending on how you want to play it. Anway, I'm definitely looking forward to the next instalment, and finding out a little bit more about this curious but arousing situation!
Finally, I'm not sure if you're interested in having typos pointed out, but I noticed one:
"she leaned over and unlocking the penis cover from my belt."
Great story, I loved all of it. I really hope you are working on Chapter 2.
I love your story so far, I can't wait for the next chapter.
Nice big fun imagination, spirit of adventurousness, and not forgetting the hottness, nicely done, fella ...
I have read, and reread this story over and over. Next installment please. ASAP.
Great story. I'd like to read part two, although I guess I should not hold my breath