All Comments on 'Upon Snow Capped Hills'

But there were points where you reached maybe a little too far for the right phrase--"facial insides," for instance? And I don't think "whippoorwills of snow" quite works.

That said, I'm not usually a fan of erotic horror, but I found this a fine example of the genre.

LOVED the premise of this story.

Not wild about all of the romance-novel phrasing at the beginning, and it could have used some clean-up round and about, but it was a really, really great plot and I really would have loved more detailing of it.

I really hope that in the future you revisit this piece with a good editor and do a sweep and clean- this is definitely a story that has the potential to be a really sexy, creepy read.

Wasn't crazy about the begining, but as I got into it the rest didn't matter. Interesting idea, can't wait for the next part....

there is going to be one...right?

Wasn't crazy about the begining, but as I got into it the rest didn't matter. Interesting idea, can't wait for the next part....

there is going to be one...right?

It got pretty steamy despite the setting!

The part where she's having sex with him and being ripped apart eek. I had to close my legs to read it! Love the imagination and the open ending. Is it possible that she will lie there until a group of male campers come along? A few edits needed, but hey, none of us is perfect and who wouldn't benefit from a good editor?