by whitebbwslut
Not much of a foundation for the Dom/sub relationship since there's no love here. That's my biggest complaint with the tale.
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In terms of fiction, the storytelling is modest. The prose is unremarkable, the characters aren't extensively described nor developed, and there's no plot to speak of. It's a stroke story in the end, and it's not quality fiction. The author focuses on the what, rather than the why. Eroticism thrives on who and why, not how nor what.
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Thank you for your effort.
I really liked your story. Please write more. I just read it yesterday and I've already fantasized about it while masturbating.
Cough cough. It is very lucky that it isnt trash then isnt it so your comment does not apply. if you dont like it dumbass... dont read it!