by golitfls
It seems obvious that English isn't your language. I won't complain about the grammar or sentence structure, your proofreader SHOULD have helped you on that.
The story, though, was kind of goofy, and wholly unbelievable, from the dialog to the events that you put forward.
Keep trying -
I have to say, you come off as a bit "unexperienced".
You are from India, aren't you?
Is it common to be naked in front of your elders in India? What about housemaids? Do you guys walk around naked in front of them too?
the story is good,hope to know how circumcision ceremony got take palce.
I look forward to reading about your circumcision ceremony and what fun the women who attended had.