All Comments on 'Valentine Surprise'

Good story. Good luck on the contest.

Good story but sprinkling PEDALS over the floor rather painful to walk over.

Good story, liked it!

Some details need refining. His wife dies on the first time in 27 years they have a chance to be alone. 3 years later he is 45. were his kids born when he was 15?

also, if the identity of the women was obvious to us, it should have been to him as well. especially as he hears them moaning, encouraging him to come, etc, or even seeing the green eyes.

With the exception of some minor typos (and as one pointed out - time line issues) this was a lovely, and yes I will say it, hot, story. Find yourself a good editor and keep on writing.

We would all be so lucky as to find ourselves so blessed and so challenged - he has his work cut out for him but they seem dedicated to making his life work -

Good story well executed with just the right tension - the story being here made it easier for the reader to know it was them before you let him in on it heh but ah well not all suspense is in the readers mind heh.

- Really enjoyed this unusual and sexy story. The prof. went from lonely to two lovers overnight. Always good to read a happy ending! ~ Well done!

Oh How I wish it could happen

Of course, we all knew what was happening, except for the slow-witted widower. But, like a good Columbo, knowing the ending didn't hurt the story. Very erotic. It's why you keep getting 5s.

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But a few typos (I know it's old):

principle at the school => principal at the school

waist away => waste away

flower pedals => flower petals

Great story as always. Even though it was obvious what was going to happen I really enjoyed it.

Great story!

That poor man! Suffering so bravely. LOL!

Very sexy and loving!

Great story and storyline... thank you.