All Comments on 'Violent Star Ch. 004'

Absolutely perfect for a quick wank but while writing stories which have a plot other than wanking a nice seguay is needed. The sex scene seems abrupt, no back story on the girl that is of any relevance such as, how she got bold from shy, description of sex lacking, remember buildup is very important without it the reader cannot form emotional bonds without it the sex scene would become separate from the story like eating a banana inbetween a steak totally out of place and unappetizing but was a good attempt.

Lily isn't shy, she's bold. she's cold to whom she finds annoying. deep inside she is kind-hearted. The only shy girl so far would be Livia from The Moon Empire...

TBH, it is quite abrupt, but to me it doesn't seem forced though. MC got seduced so he smashed, since he doesn't consider it inappropriate. In her case she might have a psychological reason as well. Why she wanted Vill's D will be explained later in the story.