by Kousakacomplex
You write some really stupid stuff on really good stories. You'd prob get a full 5 start for most of your work if you kept the cats and bunnies and sluts and whores out of your mouth. Your mind can't stay to one track. Your need for naughty words never fits the story. You're more into taboo crap than sticking to one theme. They're should be a tag for great story except towards the end of during sex where it just derails. Don't know why I keep reading the stories but I just have to try to ignore the crap I don't like to see the over all picture. Could have been an epic epic author but most are at best 3 or of 5 when they just falter in parts and the twists at the end.
Sure, it was hot, but "I brought a pillow to a chainsaw fight" is brilliant.
Future world with lots of spore showers from passing interplanetary bodies. So much fun! Its awesome!
The first half was pretty amazing. The second half, ya know the happy feel good cheesy part, was dull. I don't mean genre wise either. The writing felt hollow after the spores ended.
Still, great story.
What's a bit ironic is that a pillow might be the perfect weapon to use against a chainsaw. Some of you might call me crazy and I'll admit of prefer something more practical as well however, the cloth from the pillow can easily get stuck in the teeth of the chain saw and it will make the chain saw lock up and be utterly useless in a fight except for being a blunt object but a bat or hell a pan will work better as a blunt weapon then an awkward chainsaw.
I am impressed a breath of fresh air! A story line thats original for a change and a good story at that . . I thought it was well written and a great read . . thanks
The story is very good! There are several places the prepositions like 'to', 'in' or 'on' are missing, but these detracted very little from the flow of this. Keep up the good work.
This story is amazing, it's so captivating that I could read it repeatedly for hours upon hours. Keep up the amazing work, I'm definetly going to check out your other stories.
GREAT JOB!!!
Thanks for all of the comments/feedback guys. I really appreciate it. :)
I usually don't comment but you wrote the story so well I thought it was like reading a published short story. Please keep writing. You have a way to pull in your audience. I loved it. Don't let anyone stop you.
Excellent story. There were some parts that seemed to skip time a bit but I loved every minute. Amazing use of description and I would read any more work you have.
Not all anonymous commenters are evil trolls that can't think past their narrow mind.I personally enjoyed this little ditty can see a series out of it. Well written remember haters hate no matter what.
Good work on this. I think it's solid piece. Keep up the good writing.
First, ignore the haters that do not have the balls to put a name with their comments. The story was well written and had a feasible story line to follow. Keep writing. I look forward to seeing more of your work.
Enjoyed it. Keep going and ignore the negagive comments unless they give actual advice :)
On dear couldn't get past the first third of the first page got more holes in it than a polo factory