All Comments on 'Virginity Lost on Vacation'

loved how you built up the passion on pages 3 and 4. well written. although you almost lost me going thru pagers 1, 2 and part of 3. way too much history.

The setup was great, but the payoff was lacking for me. You really took your time right until he was ready to penetrate, then sped through it and make it sound like a documentary. This was frustrating for me as a reader, because I was really invested in your female lead. You did a great job of getting me hard and interested at least. Good job, thanks.

I loved the Jewish Mother & nerdy Warren, but a bit less repetition would be good. I liked the jokes too. Nice sex at the end. A good read.

Any follow up story to this one?

Nice story... Great buildup. However, the anal and condom distracted.

Bueno