All Comments on 'Virtual Reality: Halo'

I read it in draft, and the finished product is better yet. A must read for videogamers. Great job, Jen.

Great job!!!! Well written and HOT!!

Felt like I was there! You've definitely done the game justice. :)

Script

This is my first ever comment and I'm glad to leave one on a masterful work such as this. I played through this chapter a lot and you did a wonderful job capturing every detail of it. I loved the ending as well. Bravo!

I've only watched the game played for a few minutes, but I can tell you've captured it well. The story pacing is great, and you merge yourself into the world perfectly =)

I'm not even into video games, and I love it anyway. Great job, Jen!

as a halo fan, and one who dreams himself into books, movies video games quit often, all i can say is well done. *****

crzymnky666

Every thing about the story, if their was more like this.

Thank you so much for writing the best Halo related erotica I've read and the first that was actually worth reading. You captured the game so well. I really loved the comment on Keyes' nametag.

Where this really shines is your portrayal of the Master Chief. You stayed true to his character while finally giving the poor man some action that wasn't related to killing.

My only complaint is that I wish there was more!

it was awesome, i loved it

there is only one sentance to describe it that story is fucken amazing great job with the details and way to go you gave little johnny his first and now he can proudly say he lost his virginity well done

I adore everything Halo and am so impresssed with this story! I read this last night ... same day as "Halo 4: Forward Unto Dawn" webseries was released.

I loved fieryjen's character development of John - his initial indifference, confusion and virginity makes total sense! Part of my John-117 obsession IS because he is so "HOT" and fieryjen just made him 100x HOTTER ... grrr! Crap, who can concentrate on covenant kill shots when I keep thinking about sex with Master Chief???

My only criticism is that the story ended!

Your writing style in this peice has a hint of Karen Traviss in it. It was an excellent read! If you are still actively writing, you should get published

Write more! Please!