All Comments on 'Visitations Ch. 01'

You've created a snapshot of a moment that is well done. Enough detail to set the picture in the readers mind and allow their own imagination to fill in the rest. Nice job.

bearslady

The Emperor Joseph II said to Mozart

"My dear young man, don't take it too hard. Your work is ingenious. It's quality work. And there are simply too many notes, that's all."

And so I say it to you: too many unnecessary words

Not too many words at all, perfectly described the illicit nocturnal visit, painted a clear picture of their coupling.