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DameSabrina1964DameSabrina1964over 8 years ago
nice.

It is a nice idea for a story. Even the present tense and the use of the first and second person are refreshing.

But it would have been better if you had someone check for spelling and grammar errors, and if you had told the background within the story and had not started the story without it and had then added it as a short author's note.

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looking for roleplay where Im coerced/forced into submission. I like to start on equal ground, but do something or get caught or put in a situation where a Dominant gets the upper hand and has a plan to slowly, covertly lead me to a point of no return: spankings, forced nudit...