All Comments on 'Vitamin G Ch. 01'

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I enjoyed this. Few spelling errors that had me pausing, but I thoroughly enjoyed reading it. I hope you post more.

Really good writing, hope to see more

Knock her up in the next chapter!

Your spelling, and writing in general, needs alot of work. You use very poor sentence structure and repeat yourself alot.

With that said, your story idea, where you went with it, and how you got there, I quite enjoyed. Keep at it, like everything else, you'll get better with practice. I look forward to your next chapter.

Thanks!

Can’t wait for the Sequel! Hopefully more twisted!

I hop part 2 is in the works & also that mother and sister are used.

Wow wow I did something similar with my sister

Loved it. Great fantasy story

Loved it! I love when a smart ass gets what she/he deserves!

awesome!

Oh yeah perfect, absolutely perfect. He should keep railing his sexy sister unprotected until he puts a baby in her. That's what every big brother secretly wants anyway!