All Comments on 'Vivian'

This story was the verbal equivalent of coming out of the gate atop a Brahma bull at a rodeo. I got bucked off about half way through. There's really no story here. Descriptions of sexual activities by themselves do not a story make; no matter how well written they are. I also saw no logical reasons to have three parts since what you wrote is one continuous encounter. I guess it might appeal to somebody looking for a quick jerk off fantasy but I can't say it is erotic literature.