All Comments on 'Voice of the Mind Ch. 01'

Shows promise. Off to a good start.

Just a few small grimmer issues but your post script explained that very well. I like the concept of the story and the Characters can be developed is so many ways and directions. It feels well thought out and I look forward to the coming chapters

Thank you for your kind words! I hope you can appreciate the following chapters as well.

You make less English and grammar mistakes than most that have lived Stateside their whole lives! I have enjoyed the story and look forward to more! I usually can't get myself past the 1st paragraph or so before moving on because I'm just a weird reader, but, you've caught my interest!