All Comments on 'Walk In Ch. 02'

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lrogerb over 10 years ago

I loved it

Wow what a turn on. Not much sex yet but I can see more to cum in the next chapters. At least there had better be more. I really loved it when her dad kissed her in the water then her jacking him off. Keep up the good work and how will know when you have continued the story? Mail me please. baulloyder@centurylink.net

Anonymousover 8 years ago

Omg amazing. Please continue this?!?!?!

PM_ME_YOUR_TROUBLES over 4 years ago

Very confusing and holes in the story compared to the first chapter.

Such as, she didn't know what hard cocks were, and this time the first time she sees one, no comment? First time she holds one no comment? And other continuity errors. At one point I spend a few minutes reading the same couple of paragraphs over and over trying to make sense of it. First chapter was 4 stars. This one was 2.5 for me.

PM_ME_YOUR_TROUBLES over 4 years ago

Wait what. Where is the third chapter! :(

You said this was a 3 part series :(

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