All Comments on 'Walking in Daylight Ch. 01'

Please do continue and I hope that Pen will be able to prove those who made his life a living hell wrong.

great start to what could be a fabulous story. hope to see the next chapter soon!!!

I enjoyed the first chapter of this story. I hope to see more coming soon. I want to know if it will have a happy ending for the main characters.

This was a great start to a potentially awesome story. Just one little problem. The dates you used. You started with 2020 and Pen was six. Then you had 2028 and he was 14. However, you then go back in time to 2012. That was very distracting and confusing. We know Pen is now in high school but we don't know what grade because of the error. It is little things like this that can disrupt the flow and turn off readers, so if it were me I would fix it.

Arg, yes, the date. The last date should be 2032. I had changed it, but I guess I forgot to save and didn't notice before submitting. My apologies. So, during that last part, Pen is 18.

Next chapter is about halfway done, so look for it soon!

Wonderful start to your story. Eagerly await the next chapter. Hopefully Ryan and Pen get together and Ryan can help correct all the wrongs Pen was put through.

Oh, this is a good start to a potentially interesting (and yummy) story. Can't wait for more!

please add more chapters and soon :)

How have i never found your work before this?? I'm loving the story and will definitely keep reading! Chapter 2 here I come...

You and me both, aonymous. Great begining :)

So a day walker is bad, but why did benjamin sound proud to run out the night walker family? And what is pen exactly?

Still as good as the first and onto the next chapter....