All Comments on 'Wanda's Pool Table'

Please have your stories PROOF read and corrected BEFORE publishing. "Wanda's shirt drops to the floor off her shoulders to the floor and closely followed by her skirt."

is probably the worst but there are MANY others. IE the story is in the present tense and a couple is singular so it's not "Now this couple was hot," it's "Now this couple ARE hot." and there are other similar mistakes.

This couple (single even though it implies two) needs 'is'

crutch which is a walking aid. should have been crotch.

Story is in third person except for my in two places

She star instead of starts