All Comments on 'Wardrobe Disagreement Ch. 02'

" With a bend at the waste a on looker could see everything, other than that they were covered."

WOW.

"There is only about a two foot gape between the end of the bar and the wall." GAPE?

WOW.

"I had ruined the adulteresses evening and i was feeling good."

Now, this is unimpressive.

"She was soo strong Oh my god I couldn't get free. My fingers began to tingle, my vision was fading I began to dry heave. My body shook violently attempting to get air. And then i could breathe, her hand was gone. I crumpled to the floor gasping. I hear "Get up." her voice is calm and smooth. I am too busy catching up on breathing to stand."

She was--she is. Pick one, preferably past tense.

Poor story.