All Comments on 'We Need To Talk'

Very well done. This story doesn't need another chapter, but I would love to read more about these two.

Verry nice thanks

This is a babe of a story. A beauty of mini chick flick! Love you for this offering. FZC

Please continue the story, I am looking forward to reading more.

A very warm and romantic story, thus far. Well written, and a lovely read. As for the category — non-erotic was being pretty conservative... romance would have worked well, and for readers it is sometimes better in a multi-chapter story if all of the chapters are in the same genre. Looking forward to additional chapters. I hope that you aren't planning on leaving us with a beautiful woman snuggling up, nude, next to a man who has just confessed to a long-time unrequited love, and says, 'We have to talk', with no follow-on!

Great story hope there's another chapter possible

What can I say. This would work as a standalone, but i hope you come back with a second chapter. This one cries out for a realized happy ending.

It's rare that I see extremely short stories like this done this well. And I think taking the sex out of it really helped, because dozens to hundreds of words on the oooh's and ahhh's didn't have to be wasted on such a short story like tihs, enabling both characters to be explored more fully, albeit in truncated forms. <p>

Again, congrats on such an extremely well done job with its length.

Good story. If you decide to do part 2 (or more, please) I'm sure Romance would be a great place for it.

Please would like a part 2 where they continue to grow and his X finally learns the why.

I'm dying to read parts 2, 3, etc. What a lovely story, with real romance and desire and the promise of intense lovemaking, which includes the best sex possible. More, more!!!

Of course, it can stand alone, but it would be such a shame to end such a beautiful story at this point. Please tell us the rest of the story.

Very few really short stories can stand on their own, leaving much to the reader and yet saying all that need saying. This is one of them. Well done.

Michael

This was a well written story! This is a top notch romance. I have enjoyed the read.

I hope to see a satisfying conclusion. This story deserves flesching out the details so the jouney to its end will have meaning and satisfaction!

Thanks for writing!

between a short, concise story about life, living, and relationship is that after you've read it, you say to yourself, "Yeah, I can visualize that happening... it is so real; but more than real-sounding story, it's great!"... on the one hand... <p>

.... and 1,000 page long story about life, living, and relationship is that the tediously, heinously long one.... after you've read it... it's not that you say, "Noooo, that can't be happening, can't be true..." Yes, THAT too can be happening in the real world... but it's Jerry Springer and Linsey Lohan and Paris Hilton kinda virtual world.... it's totally made up, it's manufactured, to generate some form of fad or fetish in popular culture... <p>

with THIS particular short story, after you finished it, you smile to yourself and say, "Wow, it's an awesome little gem;" it's like you've just had a short session with one of the most respected philosophers, writers, sociologists, or psychologists in the world and you've just confirmed YOUR OWN observations of the human species IN YOUR CONVERSTION with the big man or woman, and you're happy that YOU ARE, after all, as capable as that deeply learned man or woman, in understanding humanity... <p>

but with the endless, meandering, and tedious stories, again, you finish it and react to it like you'd react to a rowdy, senseless, vulgar, TwilightZonish Jerry Springer show where some 23 year-old woman had just had her 6 kids, and everyone of them had a different father... and how do we know? Jerry Springer DID the DNA tests before starting the show, so there's no dispute that all the 6 little kids have different fathers... but it's not only that: none of them belongs, genetically, to her husband... but her father in law was one of the fathers.... and Jerry Springer said, it took 35 men DNA tests to find out all the real biological fathers... with the young mother's help, of course.... <p>

again, BOTH stories are very "real;" it's just the realism of the long, meandering one is like a Jerry Springer or Maury Pauvich show... and you hate yourself for secretly liking to view such absolute trashy shows, wanting to know such trashy characters as those men and that 23 year old slut who has had 6 kids by 6 different men, including one by her father in law, who, of course, is not very popular but reasonable tolerated by the young woman's young imbecilic husband, who just sits and smiles through the whole show, like he's just won the lottery or somethin'!

This was a beautiful love story that should have been written and was, you did a excellent job in the writing of it... I hope this story will be continued into a series... If I could, I would have given you 10 stars ... Please always write as your heart tells you too...

Great story! Hope you continue it.

It would be interesting to see where it could go. I think as a standalone it's nailed and you should develop out.

There's some darkness to it. As a loving brother this is almost taboo but I know of siblings that have fallen out, seemingly irreconceivably, and I've often seethed with lust for my sis-in-law. So I could wear this as, in fantasy, or an extreme reality, whatever, it's great writing...Mancelt.

Jerry in Washington State, USA - I liked the flow of your story and felt you explored the characters well for how short the story was. I would enjoy seeing you take the story a little farther. I have already imagined my own ending. I will definitely read your other stories.

the ending was a bit predictable but I think in all it was a very good story. Please keep going.

if there is one, needs to be in a different category. Please. I'm a fan of lots of foreplay and this chapter certainly qualifies as that. Now let's taste the relationship. Please.

Thank you for this story.

....I second scorpio....

I've read about the four witch sisters and this. I've invested a lot of time in you and I'm not happy about writing my own ends to the stories I read. You have great talents - including teasing us but I don't want to create where the stories should go. That's your business even if it winds up being, "and they lived happily ever after."

I'll read one or two more of your stories, but if they don't conclude well, them I'm out of here!

Like Whither goest says, we have invested a lot of time in you, and I also really don't like to write my own endings. First, I'm no writer and second, it is your job to wrap me up in contentment, set my heart at ease, and finish my relationship with your characters.

Very nice work, sweet love and a long time almost obsession he had with this woman.

Thanks for the read.

Thanks for sharing.

I must tell you that the subtleness, softness and the restrant (to the extent of criminal offence) must have come through the mind of a broken heart. If it is so, please note that you are not alone; there are hundreds, thousands others who have the feeling but not the expressions.

Be in peace, friend.

And lastly, this story is an inspiration.

P.S. By the by, could you have finished the story here, for good?

I normally read the erotica and caught this by accident, I loved it so much it made me cry. X

It is still a beautiful, touching story.

I totally agree, just a great love story; years in the making.

is this marked 'non-erotic'. Lack of explicit descriptions of raw sex does not render a story non-erotic. I find this build up erotic as hell.

In a multi-part story, please don't give individual parts different classifications. It's the overall theme which matters.

No you don’t. You CAN’T end a story with “We need to talk”. At least, not without pissing some people off. Me included. Start with it, that’s cool. Put it in the middle of the story, great. But using it as the last sentence of the story? Bad form. Unless you plan a sequel to finish “the talk”. Otherwise, Bad JuJu. Bad Karma. Trust me.

Come on down, TK U MLJ LV NV

Tremendous ch. 1. So what do we have to talk about? Hmmm...

i see parts two and three are available however, I thought your story had the perfect ending. Well Done! BZ

Patch

Pls. ignore the anon comment saying you can't end YOUR story the way you chose to! I think it's fun and fine. Sure, it would be great to have another chapter or two but leaving things to the reader's imagination is a fine writing technique.

This is my first time reading one of your stories. Thank you for writing for us to enjoy!

I'm def going to be checking out more of your works.

I'm a Lit user but don't recall my user name so I'll post this as Anon

Excellent beginning. Liked it a lot.

Very entertaining and well written. It would have been nice to have some more chapters, but the ending made it fairly clear to see what was going to happen. Both characters seemed to be made for each other. Thanks

Nice steady story so far,