All Comments on 'We Turn 18'

Not a bad start but there is a whole lot to fix first before venturing on:

- missing adjectives & verbs in almost all the segments;

- backstory that could use a bit of polish and expansion;

- forced dialogue and no insight into the though process of the characters;

- happy end with a bitt to much happy - here did the tension go?;

- characters need some room for growth to make them appealing;

If you ever decide to make this a series, or even if not, do a review of it and fix the above mentioned issues. The idea is nice and the happy ending makes it worth while though.

4* for the work and encouragement.

I agree with the last comment.

When you write something and you are asking people to read it then you need to respect the reader and to entice them as well. Only one way to do that and have them come back for more..., edit, edit, edit.

Edit for grammar. Edit for content. Edit for realism. Edit for mistakes. Edit, edit, edit.

It WILL pay dividends I guarantee.

Use them.

Yes, there were mistakes, but experience will solve that. I strongly feel there need to be more chapters of this one. Obviously, they get to sleep in the same room from that night on. There probably is more incest in the family. A lot to tell.

I think it would be a good idea to add more chapters. I think this because I did not think this kind of ending was suited to stop there. I think you should have talked about there wedding if they ended up having kids together and that stuff. Other than that great story. I gave it a 5 star rating that is how much I loved this book.

P.S. I think you should definitely make another book that follows this one

I really enjoyed the story! I gave 4 stars though. There needed to be more!

5 to a 1 just to fucking vote after reading part of ch2...gofuck yourself author!

another author that has no clue about female anatomy...