All Comments on 'Weekend Away Ch. 02'

Much better than the first chapter. This one reads so much easier than the first. The editing on this one shows. I enjoyed the new twist in the story. Hope to see chapter 3 soon.

However, the punctuation is still lacking. You need more commas to break up run on sentences. Also, the use of "ya" is way over done. The story, however is very erotic and well paced.

Always getting to many people involved. Tell you never really been there in a sibling situation. Fucked up.