All Comments on 'Weekender Pt. 01'

There are natural places to end a chapter that leaves a reader wanting more, rather than frustrated and annoyed. Good start, and hot enough to ignore many grammatical errors, but you should have followed the story arch to a more natural conclusion for the chapter.

I love the story and can play in my head. You'll always find people who think they can write better than you but they're all mouth. I love how you think so please keep your stories coming. Even the best writers get told they're rubbish by idiots xxx

More please!