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A commendable first attempt at a story. I liked the sense of sweetness that you seemed to imbue into it...however, it may be worth it to try and extend it a little, to add some more substance, perhaps? Involving the reader in the lives of the characters is always a good thing to do...perhaps if you went into some more depth about the actual characters. The sex is well written, but a sense of involvement from the readers would make this a very erotic tale.

I enjoyed this little tale. It's romantic and sexy. Well done.