All Comments on 'What Happened? Ch. 03'

cant wait for more great work so far

I love the pace right now...don't rush it, it's good how it is. Can't wait until the whole family is pregnant from Michael's potent spunk

don't stop. find out which one likes it in the ass

Need to check your time frames. Aunt talks about how he came into the store to buy plan B pills and condoms a month ago when his mother is 7 months pregnant already. Should have been 8 or 9 months ago that he came to his Aunts store.

Zigmyster - Wow, my mistake. Thank you for pointing that out. Must have been a brain lapse.

I was really hoping for more detailed pregnancy but you skipped to 7 months. id also like to see him get involved with at least one of the sisters. hopefully impregnate them

I'm looking forward to ch. 4, though I must say I wish your chapters were a bit longer, that way you can add in more "explicit content". I noticed your first chapter was 3 pages, but every subsequent chapter has been only two.

A spell checker cannot do anything except tell you a word is misspelled. It cannot tell you that the word waste is not appropriate when you're talking about someone's waist.

A good editor will also catch mistakes like the one you made about the time frame with Aunt Jessica.

Suffice it to say that I speak from experience because I am an editor for some author's on Lit.

For a first-time story writer this is high quality work. It's a scream. Fun-sexy. I can see it as a short film. Think it should be a screenplay for an R-rated short.. Not sure the incest part would fly, but there are ways around this...Hits all the high spots: virgin gets to bed older women; virgin has giant cock and unlimited stamina that puts older men to shame; his fertility does same, he's rented out as a stud, all the women and he are satisfied with the results, the older men are cuckolded, voyeurism. But all is done with a light touch. It doesn't need to be more explicit because this is a slapstick, ribald comedy. There are editorial errors that need to be corrected. But those things are minor fixes. The content and quality are excellent. Dialogue is snappy. Splicing all these erotic touchstones into one story shows real talent. It's done deftly. A bit of Chaucer and Henry Miller in here... Kudos.

Please publish the next part

It contains a lot more plot than most big cock incest stories(normally the only reason is they get addicted to the big cock), the interactions are well thought out too.

I look forward to reading more!!

I like this story i like see what happen next. Will he fuck his aunt and sisters.

Start writing a story but don't finish..

Hope you continue this some day. It was an interesting story.

Hurry back, it's starting the get really interesting.

Interesting story!! When is the next part it's been a while???????????? 5 stars

It's a great story but very unfinished. Please finish it.

Well that sucked. You get everyone going and then you get up and walk out. Fuck that get back and finish it up.

Ending sucked