All Comments on 'What I Couldn't Believe'

I assume Esmeralda felt ugly because of her infertility. A belief that is not surprising since she is Latin and Catholic. Nevertheless, it made a good hook. The characters were well developed, especially Esmeralda's internal thoughts. The use of Spanish enhanced the dialogue. The shower, sex and confession were detailed enough, but you didn't go overboard. An excellent story from beginning to end.

..and you need to learn the difference between "your" and "you're".

I suspect that English is an adopted language because some of your sentences are poorly constructed and barely credible e.g."He sighed was deep and satisfied".

Perhaps an editor would help with your next contribution.