All Comments on 'What You Gonna Do Then'

I only read a few paragraphs in before the tons of spelling and grammatical errors were just too much for me to take.

Plus, I hate, Hate, HATE it when a story's narrative refers to a character as "you", as though the reader is supposed to think that THEY (the reader) are that character. It never works (for me, anyway).

In addition to changing from second party to third party, please change from present tense to past tense.

I had a cleaning lady who was on the very large size, after a little time getting to know each other, she started to clean the house for me naked, it was then when the fun started. Not unlike this story. I do hope that this has more chapters to follow. The spelling is not an issue for us euorpeans as we are used to the translation missing letters or adding them. Keep on writing.