All Comments on 'What You Were Missing'

After reading this I didn't know what to do with the rock hard pole I had. Awesome story - please share more where that came from !!!!

Only a couple of minor edits needed - mostly in tense etc.

You definitely have a talent for writing so I hope you have ideas for other stories, either a continuation of this one or taking a cut at another direction.

I loved the way that you moved the point of view back and forth between

the two without forcing the shift - the transitions flowed effortlessly.

Hope to see more of your style of writing soon !!!

She needs to used long hard and often turned into his slut

Oh my god this was perfect, I loved it. I hope to see a chapter two soon????? I feel like everyone would love to see if their sexual interactions happened again when mark comes home and what they do:)

As a female, I liked the interplay between the two. But the language was a little rough for me. If it had been more gentle, my rating would have been a lot higher.

A good, well-written, dirty romp. You take the time to develop interesting characters, then turn them loose on each other to release their pent-up sexual frustration. Putting on my editor's hat, you sometimes switch POV from Josie to Christian, which is a little jolting in a short piece. And I think you meant "coquettish" "croquettish."

Looking forward to more of your stories.